Thursday, March 30, 2017

Tuesday T1W9 Reading activity

this is my work on Tuesday i had to do this for 3 days but it is finally finished.
The video was really interesting it is the first learning video i like to listen too.

Monday, March 27, 2017

WALT working together as a team

On Monday kiwisport got canceled so Miss Ashley and Miss Morison decided that Rm 7 vs Rm 8 at line basketball.

I thought Rm 7 was going to play with just us but Rm8 wanted to play with us so Miss Ashley had an idea it was Rm 7 (the best class) and Rm 8 (the 2ed best)
Will vs each other.

Rm 7 flowed Rm 8 to the court Miss Ashley said get in arder it had to be boy girl boy girl because the boys were talking at each other.


We started playing the game it was my turn and when I went up i was so scared it was like i was standing in front of 2,000 people but it was not really scary when i had the ball.


We finished at 12.27 we won we had 3 points and Rm 8 had 1 we were humble winners and Rm 8 were gracious losers we had lots of fun i hope we do that again.

Marking my story!
Ideas
Structure and Language
Organisation
Vocabulary
Sentence Structure
Spelling
Punctuation
R3
R2
R2
R3
R3
R2
R2
Total score (add the numbers next to the R’s altogether)
17
My E-asttle score is … (click here and see what your score is)
1A

Thursday, March 16, 2017

WALT self -check our stories using a rubric.

The story i wrote on Monday

Monday 13th march 2017

Today in room 7 Miss Ashley showed us a box she said ‘’what is this’’ and my whole class yelled it was a box it was made out of recycled coke box she said ‘’no this is not just a box it is my magic box’’ and she told us what to do.


She told us that she was going to chose someone to come up.She is going to blindfold them,after that when she blindfold’s that person the person she is going to put something in the magic box and she chose Syraiah-lee, she got blindfolded and Miss Ashley put mustard in the box.

She was scared like she was going to full of a cliff.When she put her hand in the box she squealed ewww!! and the class was laughing,she could not get what it was so she said ‘’can you just tell me what it is?


After her turn it was finally my turn i went up with coffedents but as soon the blindfold went on my eyes i felt like the world disappeared i was a little scared when everyone yelled wooooooo!! I was frightened because it might be something disgusting i put my shaky hand in the bowl, I put my hand in and i just yelled ‘’ewwwww! What the what is this it felt like jel and cream and the color was white, my hand was hard to move my hand in.Miss Ashley gave me a hint she said ‘’most man use it’’ this was going to be hard so i just gave up and i took the blind off and it was shaving foam.



It was so fun i wish we can do that again but with food only.  
         



The story i edit on Tuesday
Monday 13th march 2017

Today in room 7 Miss Ashley showed us a box she said ‘’what is this’’ and my whole class yelled it was a box it was made out of recycled coke box she said ‘’no this is not just a box it is my magic box’’ and she told us what to do.

She told us that she was going to chose someone to come up.She is going to blindfold them,after that when she blindfold’s that person the person she is going to put something in the magic box and she chose Syariah-lee, she got blindfolded and Miss Ashley put mustard in the box.

She was scared like she was going to full of a cliff.When she put her hand in the box she squealed ewww!! and the class was laughing,she could not get what it was so she said ‘’can you just tell me what it is? As I stood waiting, my heart was beating fast.        

After her turn it was finally my turn i went up with coffedents but as soon the blindfold went on my eyes i felt like the world disappeared i was a little scared when everyone yelled wooooooo!! I was frightened because it might be something disgusting i put my shaky hand in the bowl, I put my hand in and i just yelled ‘’ewwwww! What the what is this it felt like jel and cream and the color was white, my hand was hard to move my hand in.Miss Ashley gave me a hint she said ‘’most man use it’’ this was going to be hard so i just gave up and i took the blind off and it was shaving foam.Ew.



It was so fun i wish we can do that again but with food only.  

Sentence starters to use:
  • As I stood waiting, my heart was
  • I put my hand nervously into the box, and I felt
  • When Miss Ashley put the blindfold on, it felt like
  • The class giggled as

Did I remember to include….
Yes
Title
Yes
Introduction
Yes
Who, what, when, where, why, how
Yes
3 paragraphs - burger model
Yes
Conclusion - my own thinking/reflection
Yes
Specific adjectives
Yes
Simile/Metaphor
Yes
Different punctuation
Yes
Short sentence for effect
Yes
Correct spelling throughout the story
Yes
A sentence you have added in editing
Yes
A sentence you have moved in editing
Yes  
Sentence starters given



         

Friday, March 10, 2017

rubbish rap

Okey excuse Tamaki
we should all pick our rubbish
but we should all be together
Thats a blog we can publish
okey i heard we can work and be a team maybe we should go pick up some rubbish at the stream.see i don’t care about bullies i care about the rubbish fully,

By Angel and Edith

Wednesday, March 8, 2017

WALT use expression when we read - Reflection

Smarty Pants group week 6 I think i need more fluency when i read. I need more expression. I need to read faster not slower. I ‘’need’’ to know when it is my turn to speak because sometimes i just daydreaming and forget about my reading.

WALT structure our paragraph using the burger modal

video


The Hamburger paragraph
we were learning about the topic, 3 supporting sentence,and a concluding sentence we were talking about it and we had to talk about it or write about it this is a video of me talking about

The Hamburger paragraph