WALT self -check our stories using a rubric.

The story i wrote on Monday

Monday 13th march 2017

Today in room 7 Miss Ashley showed us a box she said ‘’what is this’’ and my whole class yelled it was a box it was made out of recycled coke box she said ‘’no this is not just a box it is my magic box’’ and she told us what to do.

She told us that she was going to chose someone to come up.She is going to blindfold them,after that when she blindfold’s that person the person she is going to put something in the magic box and she chose Syraiah-lee, she got blindfolded and Miss Ashley put mustard in the box.

She was scared like she was going to full of a cliff.When she put her hand in the box she squealed ewww!! and the class was laughing,she could not get what it was so she said ‘’can you just tell me what it is?

After her turn it was finally my turn i went up with coffedents but as soon the blindfold went on my eyes i felt like the world disappeared i was a little scared when everyone yelled wooooooo!! I was frightened because it might be something disgusting i put my shaky hand in the bowl, I put my hand in and i just yelled ‘’ewwwww! What the what is this it felt like jel and cream and the color was white, my hand was hard to move my hand in.Miss Ashley gave me a hint she said ‘’most man use it’’ this was going to be hard so i just gave up and i took the blind off and it was shaving foam.

It was so fun i wish we can do that again but with food only.  

         

The story i edit on Tuesday

Monday 13th march 2017

Today in room 7 Miss Ashley showed us a box she said ‘’what is this’’ and my whole class yelled it was a box it was made out of recycled coke box she said ‘’no this is not just a box it is my magic box’’ and she told us what to do.

She told us that she was going to chose someone to come up.She is going to blindfold them,after that when she blindfold’s that person the person she is going to put something in the magic box and she chose Syariah-lee, she got blindfolded and Miss Ashley put mustard in the box.

She was scared like she was going to full of a cliff.When she put her hand in the box she squealed ewww!! and the class was laughing,she could not get what it was so she said ‘’can you just tell me what it is? As I stood waiting, my heart was beating fast.        

After her turn it was finally my turn i went up with coffedents but as soon the blindfold went on my eyes i felt like the world disappeared i was a little scared when everyone yelled wooooooo!! I was frightened because it might be something disgusting i put my shaky hand in the bowl, I put my hand in and i just yelled ‘’ewwwww! What the what is this it felt like jel and cream and the color was white, my hand was hard to move my hand in.Miss Ashley gave me a hint she said ‘’most man use it’’ this was going to be hard so i just gave up and i took the blind off and it was shaving foam.Ew.

It was so fun i wish we can do that again but with food only.  

Sentence starters to use:

• As I stood waiting, my heart was
• I put my hand nervously into the box, and I felt
• When Miss Ashley put the blindfold on, it felt like
• The class giggled as

Did I remember to include….
Yes	Title
Yes	Introduction
Yes	Who, what, when, where, why, how
Yes	3 paragraphs - burger model
Yes	Conclusion - my own thinking/reflection
Yes	Specific adjectives
Yes	Simile/Metaphor
Yes	Different punctuation
Yes	Short sentence for effect
Yes	Correct spelling throughout the story
Yes	A sentence you have added in editing
Yes	A sentence you have moved in editing
Yes	Sentence starters given

         

WALT use expression when we read - Reflection

Smarty Pants group week 6 I think i need more fluency when i read. I need more expression. I need to read faster not slower. I ‘’need’’ to know when it is my turn to speak because sometimes i just daydreaming and forget about my reading.

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WALT find why did John Key step down.

writing words about the earthquake

Find 5 words you found in the blogpost that were new to you. Record these, and find the meaning. An example has been done for you. You can add an image if you want to.
chaotic	When something is very busy, lots of people are there, maybe everyone is confused.
After shock	sitting
shaking	swaying
felt	powerful
Moving	building
something	shock
Find a phrase that you didn’t know, or helped create a picture in your head. Find out what it means. An example has been done for you. You can add an image if you want to.
as if the ground had turned to liquid.	This helped me create a picture in my head of the ground turning from solid to liquid. In my head I couldn’t stand up anymore, I was falling over and all the stuff around me fell to the ground as well. Everything was moving.

write a poem or a story about the earthquakes.

Write a poem about earthquakes. Maybe an acrostic poem, or any other type of poem you want. Try to use powerful words from the video, like these Desperate Disorganised Dig frantically in hope A community overwhelmed A mound of rubble Catastrophe

Start here: Earthquake

In iron there was A earthquake it was so bad i was watching a video it was about the most powerful  earthquake in the world,and there was sumange everyone was so frightened when they saw it.Everything was damaged some people died and some people survivors most of the children were dead i was so sad i imagined if was me,we are so lucky have a earthquake like that.   

De Bono's thinking hats

WALT:learn about dreamworld 4 people died & 2 kids survived.

WALT:learn about our celebration and tell people about it.

Once there was a girl named Ana.She went to a scary twirly  slide.She went by herself.It was the scaryst slide ever.

So she got a yellow bout and she went in the tanal and she slipped and hit her gluseyesmaxsames on the bout and she speeded down she thought that it was not scary.She went in circles and it was done

WALT: when we read a story we come on five finger ratell.

On a big narstie day Max went on a holladay. He ran to the sea the smallest sea in the world and he saw a bout he thought that it was a nice day but the other people ‘said ‘NO WE DO NOT WANT TO COME WITH YOU he did not know why they think that it is a big narstie day. So he went by himself because everyone said NO to him so he went. When he went on the bout he was fishing,then he got a big fish but he saw a little green tail. But when he pulled it up it was a little crocodile.

walt to see what is the powerful world.

walt do something

this is the 2d shape &  3d shape we are trying to see what is 3d shape & 2d shape.

WALT learn how to make friendship bra slip.

this is my friendship bra slip for me & my friend this is my best one i had done so if you are reading this,this is my friendship bra slip.

WALT

the six thinking hats means about your learning.

IALT:learn about room 6

WAL: meanings of new words.