WALT self -check our stories using a rubric.

The story i wrote on Monday

Monday 13th march 2017

Today in room 7 Miss Ashley showed us a box she said ‘’what is this’’ and my whole class yelled it was a box it was made out of recycled coke box she said ‘’no this is not just a box it is my magic box’’ and she told us what to do.

She told us that she was going to chose someone to come up.She is going to blindfold them,after that when she blindfold’s that person the person she is going to put something in the magic box and she chose Syraiah-lee, she got blindfolded and Miss Ashley put mustard in the box.

She was scared like she was going to full of a cliff.When she put her hand in the box she squealed ewww!! and the class was laughing,she could not get what it was so she said ‘’can you just tell me what it is?

After her turn it was finally my turn i went up with coffedents but as soon the blindfold went on my eyes i felt like the world disappeared i was a little scared when everyone yelled wooooooo!! I was frightened because it might be something disgusting i put my shaky hand in the bowl, I put my hand in and i just yelled ‘’ewwwww! What the what is this it felt like jel and cream and the color was white, my hand was hard to move my hand in.Miss Ashley gave me a hint she said ‘’most man use it’’ this was going to be hard so i just gave up and i took the blind off and it was shaving foam.

It was so fun i wish we can do that again but with food only.  

         

The story i edit on Tuesday

Monday 13th march 2017

Today in room 7 Miss Ashley showed us a box she said ‘’what is this’’ and my whole class yelled it was a box it was made out of recycled coke box she said ‘’no this is not just a box it is my magic box’’ and she told us what to do.

She told us that she was going to chose someone to come up.She is going to blindfold them,after that when she blindfold’s that person the person she is going to put something in the magic box and she chose Syariah-lee, she got blindfolded and Miss Ashley put mustard in the box.

She was scared like she was going to full of a cliff.When she put her hand in the box she squealed ewww!! and the class was laughing,she could not get what it was so she said ‘’can you just tell me what it is? As I stood waiting, my heart was beating fast.        

After her turn it was finally my turn i went up with coffedents but as soon the blindfold went on my eyes i felt like the world disappeared i was a little scared when everyone yelled wooooooo!! I was frightened because it might be something disgusting i put my shaky hand in the bowl, I put my hand in and i just yelled ‘’ewwwww! What the what is this it felt like jel and cream and the color was white, my hand was hard to move my hand in.Miss Ashley gave me a hint she said ‘’most man use it’’ this was going to be hard so i just gave up and i took the blind off and it was shaving foam.Ew.

It was so fun i wish we can do that again but with food only.  

Sentence starters to use:

• As I stood waiting, my heart was
• I put my hand nervously into the box, and I felt
• When Miss Ashley put the blindfold on, it felt like
• The class giggled as

Did I remember to include….
Yes	Title
Yes	Introduction
Yes	Who, what, when, where, why, how
Yes	3 paragraphs - burger model
Yes	Conclusion - my own thinking/reflection
Yes	Specific adjectives
Yes	Simile/Metaphor
Yes	Different punctuation
Yes	Short sentence for effect
Yes	Correct spelling throughout the story
Yes	A sentence you have added in editing
Yes	A sentence you have moved in editing
Yes	Sentence starters given

         

rubbish rap

Okey excuse Tamaki

we should all pick our rubbish

but we should all be together

Thats a blog we can publish

okey i heard we can work and be a team maybe we should go pick up some rubbish at the stream.see i don’t care about bullies i care about the rubbish fully,

By Angel and Edith

WALT use expression when we read - Reflection

Smarty Pants group week 6 I think i need more fluency when i read. I need more expression. I need to read faster not slower. I ‘’need’’ to know when it is my turn to speak because sometimes i just daydreaming and forget about my reading.

WALT structure our paragraph using the burger modal

The Hamburger paragraph
we were learning about the topic, 3 supporting sentence,and a concluding sentence we were talking about it and we had to talk about it or write about it this is a video of me talking about

The Hamburger paragraph

Game Review

WALT: I am learning to critically evaluate a game

Your name:

I played the game: Cranium

Made by:Richard Tait and Whit Alexander.

I played this game with:Coralee

The purpose of this game is to (Hint: how do you win this game?):well me and Coralee were play and you have to chose a person and there was a play doh but it was dry so it rain and you need a color dise and if you get a color you have to go on it and there is a time and if the time runs out and the person has passed the brain than she/he has to get the brain and say i won.

My favourite thing about this game was:that if you win you get to hold the brain

One thing I didn’t like about this game was:is when you eat the brain

This game is good to play by with a group because there are more people it said you have to have 5 people/4 people,but i just did 2 player.

I would rate this game _5_ out of 10 because:i lost and i got to eat the brain but said to play another game but Coralee said no so i had to eat it but i did not eat it.

If I could recommend something to make this game better, it would be:

Add any other comments about this game here:it was so fun but i will try and not eat the brain.

whanau confrace

At whanau conference i was the post to come at 3.50 but my brother Micah he brang the time for me from his teacher so we came at that time.We came at 4.00 o’clock  and my mum came to my class and my teacher miss Ashley talked about how i am and she said thing about my learning than when we were done we got a notice and my mum sighed it,the notice is about miss Ashley can take me to a lak and we are going to adomed the creek,she can take me whenever she wants so my mum sighed it and we were done so we went home and watch moana.

Softball Tournament

On wednesday 22ed feb 2017

some of room 10 kids and some of room 8 and 7 and some of room 9 kids we had to go to our softball tournament we had to walk because the softball bus was $500 so we had to walk,it was not that far we went on a fiaud called done coert.

We were vsing Pont England A and we lost but we tried.than we lined up and high fived each other and we were saying good try,than when we were finished we went and ate and we went to paradise our throwing.We won’t aloud to bat because we might hit a window,but i was just waiting for my dad to come.

Than we went up and went to vs Pont England B and we lost again so we went to stone fired and we won it was the greatest feeling ever that we won and at the end of the finose we won again.

We came to the finose and we were vs stone fired again i had a great feeling about this and when we baited i saw my dad coming and he was going to watch me bat and when i baited it it went a little bit far and i ran it the 1st bas and i stand there because they were going to get me than every other people baited and we won again it was amazing but we came 3ed place but it was fun.